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I think you'll like it if you're into action shows. Super powers, secret agents, and all that jazz.

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Anime & Manga discussion / Re: Sword Art Online
« on: December 04, 2012, 09 AM »
Well, I stopped taking this show seriously early on and just watch it for the lulz. :lolgiri:

Lately, though, I'm just getting tired of all the incest crap. "HEY Y'KNOW HOW WE CAN MAKE THIS SHOW MORE GENERIC? BY BOARDING THE INCEST TRAIN!!" Gah, what is up with Japan and incest, anyway?

I hate Sugu and just wish they'd get to the part where Kirito and Asuna meet again or SOMETHING, IDK ANYTHING BUT ALL THIS STUPID DRAMA. How many episodes do we have left, anyway?

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SPAMBOX / Re: post a picture of your room!
« on: November 06, 2012, 10 AM »
Guh everyone has awesome rooms, so I don't wanna post mine now. D:

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This topic was a huge mistake! :sad:

But highly amusing.

Or is that just me?
You're definitely not alone.

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I don't even care anymore.

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Heeeeyyyyy, Marian, welcome to Turtle Paradise!

Well, you can read up about weeaboos on Urban Dictionary or Know Your Meme.

Anyway, no one's gonna go all Grammar Nazi on you, so you don't have to worry too much about apostrophes how you type. I mean, come on, it's ~*~The Internet~*~

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If I finish that color spread, can we release it with the last chapter? THAT WAY, IT'LL NEVER EEEEENNND AHAHAHAHAHAHahlaskhlfgkahsf

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SEIRAN IS THE ONLY PRECIOUS THING AROUND HERE RIGHT NOW

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MELFRA KNOWS WHAT'S GOIN' DOWN


EDIT: Wait, what, did I actually say 'Melfra'?

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DOESN'T MATTER, PAI, WE'LL ALL STAY UP AND WATCH IT RIGHT BEFORE S3 AIRS AND THEN WE'LL GO RIGHT INTO IT AND AND AND--

/sobs

Two years...!! 。゚(゚ノД`゚)゚。

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UGH WHY DIDN'T I QC THIS CHAPTER? I THINK IT MAY BE MY FAVORITE, TO DATE.

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Ha, so no one actually watched it?

Let's save it for when s3 comes out.

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Fanworks / Re: My short story!
« on: August 23, 2012, 12 PM »
Well, for starters, it could use better writing and grammar; I felt that it got sloppier towards the end.
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Two hours later I fall asleep and I sleep until I wake in the morning to leave for my summer work.
We already know that she fell asleep, so there's no need to put, "and I sleep," after that.
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My body-temperature feels normal again so I get out of the bath and walk to the kitchen to make a cup of hot chocolate with whipped cream and do yesterday's dishes.
This sentence just feels so crammed together, and, well... kinda boring. It sounds more like a report than a story.

And now for the story itself.

In the part where she cuts her finger while cutting the watermelon, her classmates' reaction of laughter doesn't seem very realistic. Why would they laugh? Wouldn't people normally be curious as to why a ring changes color so quickly? (Unless it was some mood ring.) Also, was the protagonist being bullied? Her classmates seemed like pretty huge douchebags/just plain stupid for 1.) Laughing at her ring changing color and 2.) Not caring about the fact that she's hurt and bleeding.

Also, why did she kill everyone? I get that the ring she found had some kind of evil power that influenced her, but there wasn't too much detail on that. I'm not saying that there should be a lot of detail on it, but it just sounds like you're adding in gore for no reason at all. It didn't have to be as extreme as killing all of her classmates. Just because it's horror doesn't mean there has to be bloodshed. A good horror story can have some mysterious elements in the ending or just leave you generally feeling a little creeped out. The only mystery to me, though, was how she was still alive at the end. Wasn't her nightmare about being burned alive? ...What did the kids have to do with the nightmare? And if she lived her nightmare, shouldn't she be dead? ...Nothing really... makes sense to me.

tl;dr Overall, it needs some work, but you'll get better as you practice.

I don't have any horror stories, but here are some horror comics I recommend. Just think of it as learning material.

His Face All Red
The Prince and the Sea
Margot's Room (For this one, you click on the items in the picture below as mentioned in the poem above. So first you click on the flowers, then the doll, and etc.)

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Yeeaaahhh, pretty much. The last post was back in April, so...

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Fanworks / Re: "original art"
« on: August 09, 2012, 09 PM »
I keep getting a 404 error page whenever I click to enlarge the pictures. DDD:

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